The Saga of Adonis
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Our literature teacher asked us to make our own epic. I really don't know what to do, where to start, what would be my epic about. So, I asked for the inspiration of movies like Tangled, Barbie and the Magic Pegasus, How to Tame Your Dragon, Shake Rattle and Roll X and Barbie and the Island Princess for the names.
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In the Island Apollonia, there lived a joyous and hard-working people. Every day was a day of celebration. They lived peacefully and harmoniously with each other. Until one time, someone came to their barrio and killed the animals. Every day, two or more animals died. The people of Apollonia cried and cried because of the loss that they have. Their every day feast became a day of tears and mourning. The tribe across the nearby river heard the sorrowful news of the barrio Apollonia. A man named Adonis came to the barrio to help them with their problem. Adonis has an amazing body, has a crooked smile and has a tantalizing. He’s passionate, loving, helpful and most of all charming. He possessed a special strength that he can carry anything thing in any size and weight. He lived for a decade there but there situation’s still the same. He tried to catch that someone who made the life of the people grievous.
Adonis met the woman name Nieves. She was the woman all the man wanted to have. But, Nieves only liked Adonis. He expressed his feelings to Nieves but she told him that it would be better if they will continue to be friends only until they can find the person who brought sorrow to their life.
Until one sunny morning, Nieves suddenly disappeared. No people ever seen heard around nor knew anything about where she was. Adonis became very worried. His Nieves was gone. He left the tribe without any word. He brought with him his dog and his magical stick. Together with his pet, they travelled every forest to search for his beloved Nieves.
On the third day of his travel, he heard from some magical creatures that Nieves was held captured by Night Fury, a toothless dragon that can travel to the speed of light. Adonis found the cavern of the hideous dragon. He fought the dragon with all the courage that he has. But, he can’t defeat it easily. He was unable to see the dragon because it flew so fast so he asked for the help of his dog that turned out to be a winged named Brietta. Like the Night Fury, Brietta can travel to the speed of light but faster that it. Brietta can breathe fire and can melt anything with its eyes. The magical stick of Adonis turned into a magical staff. He rode Brietta and together they fought the Night Fury. Day and night the fight continued. Suddenly Rayla, the Cloud Queen, appeared in between their fight. She told them to stop but they didn’t heard what she said. So, the Rayla casted a shield in between of them and they stopped. Adonis asked the Cloud Queen what is her purpose of interfering their fight. Rayla told them that they must not fight because the Night Fury was his brother who was cursed by a witch when they were still young. He took Nieves because he felt in love with her and he wanted her to be his. Adonis told him and Nieves fell in love with each other. Because of the anger of the Night Fury, he let out a fire that hit Adonis in his heart. He fell down and lost consciousness. Nieves saw what happened and ran towards Adonis. She has a magical hair that can heal and brought back anything to life. But before she can bring back Adonis to life, she has to sing the song that will bring life to her magical hair. After signing the healing incantation, Adonis woke up and hugged Nieves. Adonis thanked the Night Fury for understanding their situation and he told him that he was glad to meet his long lost brother. It was his brother who ate the animals in the barrio because he was hungry and he didn’t want to eat flesh of the people. Adonis forgave his brother and told him that he will bring him food to eat. Rayla returned to her kingdom and showered rainbows around.
Adonis and Nieves returned home with smiled on their faces. The feast followed after their wedding. The liveliness and happiness of Island Apollonia came back.
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is this your own story?
ReplyDeletehahaha sorry, i was just confused, i am thinking of Venus and Adonis by Shakespeare
Yes, this is my own story. :)
DeleteLove the happy ending. Great attempt at writing a story.
ReplyDeleteand they lived happily...like your story
ReplyDeletewrite more...
I also felt the action!
ReplyDeleteYou're a good writer. Great story! :-)
ReplyDeleteyou remind me of my friend who loves to write romance stories. you have a good plot, you can still do a revision or add more it seems :)
ReplyDeleteIt's ver interesting and fun to read. You should write books for children. :-)
ReplyDeleteHappy ever after! Great story Khim! ;)
ReplyDeleteIt's a fairly good story though the plot is quite predictable. It has the elements of an epic. You may want to go through it again though to correct some errors in grammar and usage. Just keep writing and I'm sure you'll get better at weaving engaging stories. :)
ReplyDeletenice story considering you're still at school. keep practicing to hone your writing skills. good luck.
ReplyDeleteVery nice! I recognize the Appolonia from the Barbie Island Princess and Hiccup's dragon, Night Fury :)
ReplyDeleteVery nice! Just go over it one more time for any possible typo errors and you're good to go. What is the definition of epic anyway? :)
ReplyDeleteComment here :)